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STOP MAKING ALDRIC SUCH A LOVABLE GOOFY FURBALL PLS. My heart yearns for more and I want to hug him so bad just because he simply exists. 

Simping aside, the writing is solid top-tier, undoubtedly. I've read a fair share of (furry) visual novels, and this one's story line and character interaction is really interesting. The plot line makes sense and the character development is really realistic, in a sense that it feels natural. Kudos to the team!! The artwork is mesmerizing too! The landscape is breath-taking and that specific scene of MC with Aldric eating food in MC's room is just *chef-kiss*; I have no proper adjective for such a blissful sensation. The artwork is just that good. I now demand 100 chapters by tomorrow. lol, jk. Keep it up! This (visual) novel has a tons of potential!

I think the reason that they aren't in the CH tabs is because they are side-characters. I don't recall any by the name of Amos, probably because I forgot or they might be in Ander's route, which is the only one I haven't read.

Braum and Gordon are the member of Highwell Uni.'s basketball team, you can see them talking to us in the gymnasium in Gil's (don't call him Gilbert) route.

Alex, if I recall correctly, he's Mark's brother. You can see Mark knocking on a certain door at his home when he was heading off to school or going out in Mark's episodes, albeit his knock was never answered because if I'm not mistaken, Alex is already dead. Mark just knock the door for the sake of remembrance.

Edgar is Walter's (our MC) father. He's friend with Mark's dad: Mr. Thorton, who is the owner (or a board director) of Lars' previous workplace. Not much could be said beyond this point since some of them were in the patreon build.

Albeit, I find the lack of story progression at the moment to be quite irritating, but perhaps Andy had something in mind and that he's still building up until it all reveals. 

I don't understand, the previous icon style is already fine. I'm not saying that the artist did a bad job, the new icon is just not "fitting" in a sense. The character sprite art style and the icon doesn't goes well together, since the art style are different. I don't think that anyone has trouble with the previous style, so please, consider changing it back. Thank you.

Edit 1: Or just like Swertzo in this comment section suggested: having an option to switch between the older sprite and the new one. I had asked my friend about the sprite and he said that the new one is to his liking, so having an option would be best for both sides.

It's like you paid a monthly gym membership but they close the gym for some period of time without knowing when will it be back and without any crucial update on the gym's situation; why did it close? No one knows. When will it be back? No one knows. What happened? No one really knows. Where can we check the updates then? You know, on our instagram where we only post about our staff and stuff but nothing much related to the gym itself as a whole.

https://lustful-desires-wiki.fandom.com/wiki/Aphrodisiac

Here, the recipe is already in there for a long time tbh. You might not noticed it, idk.

The funniest part of this comment is that you are unsure of your linguistic skills, yet you could form  better sentences than several natives I've talked to. lol.

Ikr, I really wanna know who that f*cker in the hoodie is and what he's going to do to my boy.

I'll put my comment here, though I don't know whether you'll see it or not. There are some aspects of Walter that I do agree with the original comment, e.g., sometimes he seems to be quite dull, like when others are talking and there's a chance that they could be hiding something. (I know this is your story and you're free to shape it however you want, and you're the only one who knows Walter's personality the best.)

However, if I were Walter and somebody was talking about things that could be related to me, I'd definitely eavesdrop a little in case there is something I should be aware of. Although, you might argued that Walter's emotional state is quite a mess due to his memory loss. 

Then another point could be made; there were several times that Walter decided not to ask an important question because of "courtesy" or some sort? Like in the Gil's route: there was a time when Walter could ask about "why did he lie to Walter," (I'm not quite sure what Walter meant by this line though.) He could have asked though questions several times but he decided to remain silent. If it was to extend the plot for a bit longer, then I think there might be a better way to shape those dialogue, like make Walter go around the question a bit and make Gil spill something without his realization.

The dialogue of each character seemed natural enough, there might be some that seems odd, but I don't really know how to improve because I'm also struggling writing those kind of conversation between characters lol.

Another point I'll agree with the original comment is that romanticizing Gil's harassment is quite off for now, but I prefer to think that maybe there might be more backstory between Gil and Walter, which made Walter responds to Gil's behavior subconsciously like the way he is. Still, I'm a Gil fan, and I tease my close friend like that occasionally, and we didn't mind it... so the fact that I'm mostly fine with Gil's behavior might stemmed from this.

Overall, there are still room for improvements of writings, dialogues, and character development, but that takes time to improve. Keep it up! : D

P.S. I find the original comment to be too harsh and things could be phrase a little bit more constructive, but again, I'm not him/her/them so I don't know what the commenter saw.

The epitome of evil in disguise, aren't cha?

I had the same problem, but I didn't have time to try out my solution yet. What came to my mind was the Bareshade expansion has to be done before we progress the Troubles in the Den, e.g., by not entering the Wolves' den when Logan was still in there, and finish the Bareshade Expansion before going in there.